Feedback from 2nd draft

• Ms suggested that we should film Mica crossing her legs and that we should have a shot of her turing around in the chair

• To place the camera on the table on the table before mica opens the book

• Ms also suggested that we change thePages of the men as there is too much information on them.
  
• And to take out the page with the car crash and have ot to something that is easy to film. to show in the flashback
  

Ms then gave us a whole new structure of what the opening sequence should know look like:

• Heels walking ( But we need a still shot of the heels)

• Side of heels like last time

• Mica sitting down

• Crossing legs a close up shot of her legs

• (camera across the desk) shot of mica straightening up (Victoria u know what this means u can demonstrate if u need to)

• Close up shot of the front of the book - Mica looks at the clock- shot of the clock

• Then Mica opening the book (across shot)

• Close up shot of page 1 (1st victim)

• Flashback of his death

• Reverse shot of mica’s face (e.g. smurk)

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock 10 mins before

• Close up shot of page 2 (2nd victim)

• 2nd flashback

• Reverse shot of mica’s face (e.g. raised eyebrow)

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock

• Close up of page 3

• 3rd flashback

• Reverse shot of mica’s face

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock 4 pm

• Tobarae’s part

• Close up shot of note saying 4

• Toborae walking to phone booth

• Close up of Mica dialling

• Toborae picking up

• “ so you got my message

• I guess I did

• Mica talks about James, Arthur and Randolph THIS IS THE DEFINITE ORDER THE FALSHBACKS AND EVERYTHING!

• “ You fool what’s up with you why are u killing people” = not script just idea

• Her laughing

• Out of his face on page in book

• Close pf mica pulling out poison poison on page etc