Group 1: Helema & Toboare

What was level 4 quality (excellent)?

• holding a steady shot where appropriate
• framing shot including and excluding elements as appropriate
• using sound with images and editing appropriatley for the task set
• using varied shot transitions and other effects selectivley
  

What was level 3 quality (proficient)?

• using titles appropriatley
• editing so that meaning is apparent to thje viewer
• using a variety of shot distances

General comments of what I really liked about this opening sequence are:

• I really like the transitions that were used as they were effective and they allowed the audinece to follow what was going on. It was very clear and precise in the storyline and the purpose of the opening sequence.

General comments of what I thought could be improved about this opening sequence are:

• The titles- the idea I think was very creative however it was very hard to even see that they were titles- I only realsied after watching it twice that it was titles and not just a peice of the school setting.

Overall, I would give this group level ___3__ because most of their work from the syllabus is within the level __3___ bracket.Overall, I would give this group a mark of ___47__ .

New Script

GISELLE
So you got my message Mr Spade

INVESTIGATOR/MR SPADE
Yes I guess I did

GISELLE
Did you get my gift?

INVESTIGATOR/MR SPADE
By gift do you mean another of your victims?

GISELLE
So you got my message Mr Spade

INVESTIGATOR/MR SPADE
Yes I guess I did

GISELLE
Did you get my gift?

INVESTIGATOR/MR SPADE
By gift do you mean another of your victims?

Our Final storyboard

Changes to title

Due to the time restrictions that we had of trying to get our opening sequences complete we did not stick to  our original idea of titles by planning on using props that would have the credits on them. Instead we just simply used the titles on i Movie as we did not have enough time. 

Changes we made or added for our last draft + final shot list

1. The length of the dialogue between the main characters
2. We added more props the femme fetale's hat
3. The diary- we changed the layout of the page and added headlines making it clear as to how the victims died. (using less information on the page as this would only be used as a flashback)
4. The leg shot of the femme fetale walking we split this in two
5. multiple shots of multiple open diary and looking through the book
6. We changed the clock and added more shots to show the three different times and that time has passed before the femme fetale makes the call
7. The investigator having a letter from the femme fetale (which made the conversation sound more realistic)
8. The poision we changed this into a small perfume port bottle
9. And the ending of the opening sequence instead of the femme fetale closing the diary with hand and ring showing- it has changed to the femme fetale slamming down the phone on the investigator, showing her dominance and authority she has over the investigator.

What we kept from the feedback we were given

From the feedback we were given the things we took on borad was the flashbacks showing the killings of the men, and we filmed this on the 22nd of April. We also used the idea of the femme fetale looking up at the clock three times showing the importance of the time.

And also the the idea of using different shots when the femme fetale is having a conversation with the investigator.

Most importantly: Shortening the dialogue between the femme fetale and the investigator and using her voice over; also the idea of the investigator having an envelope with the picture in it was alos a suggestion from our teacher. Instead of having a pro longed dialogue between two people.

Our final Opening sequence

This is our complete version of our opening sequence.

Feedback for our Final Draft

During the easter half term we used this time to edit what we had filmed so far. So today what we did was Edit and then got feedback from our teacher on what she thought. This is our second draft of our opening sequence that I was supposed to post up before the easter holiday.

Filming for our Final Draft

Today we filmed for the preperation of our final draft. We had to focus on feedback that we were given from our second draft. This was crucial as things such as Continuity and time was something that we had to ensure was right. At first we had problems with the match on action but as we were filming we were making sure that we had used a range of shots to help us with what we intended to achieve

However things that need to be completed after the easter is

• Editing

• A new storyboard

• Planning for the Evaluation

• Music
  

• Titles
  

• Processes of changes.
  

Feedback from 2nd draft

• Ms suggested that we should film Mica crossing her legs and that we should have a shot of her turing around in the chair

• To place the camera on the table on the table before mica opens the book

• Ms also suggested that we change thePages of the men as there is too much information on them.
  
• And to take out the page with the car crash and have ot to something that is easy to film. to show in the flashback
  

Ms then gave us a whole new structure of what the opening sequence should know look like:

• Heels walking ( But we need a still shot of the heels)

• Side of heels like last time

• Mica sitting down

• Crossing legs a close up shot of her legs

• (camera across the desk) shot of mica straightening up (Victoria u know what this means u can demonstrate if u need to)

• Close up shot of the front of the book - Mica looks at the clock- shot of the clock

• Then Mica opening the book (across shot)

• Close up shot of page 1 (1st victim)

• Flashback of his death

• Reverse shot of mica’s face (e.g. smurk)

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock 10 mins before

• Close up shot of page 2 (2nd victim)

• 2nd flashback

• Reverse shot of mica’s face (e.g. raised eyebrow)

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock

• Close up of page 3

• 3rd flashback

• Reverse shot of mica’s face

• Looks at clock

• Shot of clock 4 pm

• Tobarae’s part

• Close up shot of note saying 4

• Toborae walking to phone booth

• Close up of Mica dialling

• Toborae picking up

• “ so you got my message

• I guess I did

• Mica talks about James, Arthur and Randolph THIS IS THE DEFINITE ORDER THE FALSHBACKS AND EVERYTHING!

• “ You fool what’s up with you why are u killing people” = not script just idea

• Her laughing

• Out of his face on page in book

• Close pf mica pulling out poison poison on page etc