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Sunday, 14 March 2010

Feedback from class on our first draft

During the week of the 8-12th of March we just used our time to edit what we had done. Even though we still had a lot of things to add such as titles and music we still managed to get it done. During this week Adriana worked on titles, while Mica and I edited. However I started working on the music when I realsied that I was putting myself under a lot of strain as one member of our group was missing. So I decided to leave out our music and only put in what I had worked on so far and not the completed thing as I felt it was unfair that only three of us were working on our opening sequence when it is supose to be 4 of us.

Bearing this in mind- During our lesson on the 10th our teacher gathered the class up and we all watched each groups opening sequenec followed by feeedback and a level using our mark schemes. When gettin feedback on ours we were told that

  • Our opening sequence is too long
  • It is very prolonged
  • some of the scenes take to long to go into the next
  • it does not look like a film noir the only convention that we have stuck to is the idea of the femme fetale
  • I need to be more precise in what I want my audience to think and know
Gettin this feedback from our first draft it was said to be at a level 1
So what Mica decided was to chnage things up a bit by speeding it up making things look like the femme fetale is in a rush. Adriana then decided that we should use a phone beox for the investogator to show this more as it is a convetion.

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